Writing the dialogue

tip1:write the dialogue that is suitable for the character/personality

tip2:write only necessary info to tell your story.KEEP IT SIMPLE>SHORT SENTENCES

tip3:Listen to the dialogues on good tv shows & listen to how people talk in real life

CLASS/GROUP EXERCISE:WRITING DIALOGUES
Topic:DOMINO
Key Character: saengyo(woman in white shirt)
Souen(girl in yellow shirt)

Bystander : Bystander

STORY

They fight over pizza

Scene1

*gets out of the car*

Saengyo: OI Souen!

Souen: what?!

Saengyo: I need a word with you?

Souen : *Sigh*

Saengyo: Did you eat it?

Souen: Huh?

Saengyo: I can smell the pizza coming out from your breath.

Souen: What? It wasn't me. My pet octopus ate it.

Saengyo: Dont lie to me. You don't have a octopus. Blah..blahblahblah. Etc.

Soeun: C'mon, you know i worked at the aquarium.

Saengyo: Don't you freaking lie to me.

*Saengyo grabs Souen's arm*

Souen: You little bastard!

Bystander 1: Oh my they're gonna kill each other! I bet $5 on the yellow shirt.
Bystander 2: I bet $10 on the white one.

Bystander 1: Oh my god! Who's gonna win?

*fight commence*
*Saengyo snatched Soeun's bag*

Saengyo: THIS IS FOR PIZZA HUT!

Souen's child: *gasp*

Saengyo's child: Ma!

*fight breaks off*

Saengyo: Ugh…

*Saengyo drives off*

Saengyo: C'mon honey, we're going to pizza hut for dinner.

Saengyo's child: Yaaayyyyyyyyyy!!!!



Done by: Barnabas, Khairizal, Martin.

designing the visual world through:
Characters
situation
location/set
scenarios
atmosphere
colours
costumes/Hair/Make up
Props
language
music & Sound effects

Amora industries Informs
-black and white movie
-is dark becoz cricket sound
-eatting dinner

1.Character Development

-how they introduce new characters

2.Presentation Style

-how do they present characters in situation

-genre 

-style of presenting key ideas and key messages

3. 3 Act - esp act1-->Set up

-watch how they do it

6-8 Screen shot on her blog

Story

Out of Jealousy

by

Barnabas Loke Hon Yuen

2C

(My 1-Sentence Summary here – this is for selling your work on the cover page! Tell me what your story is all about. Notes: This is double-spaced, font is times new roman, point size is 11pts. )

Peter who could not rest in peace wants to kill the murderer Jack

EXERCISE 1

My Blog: www.waking-th3-demon.blogspot.com

My Email: path_of_light1992@hotmail.com

Deadline: 31 Jan 2013

EXECUTIVE SUMMARY:

TITLE:                                     Out of Jealousy

GENRE:                                  Horror/Romance/Funnyx

TARGET AUDIENCE:            Adults

THE DOMINANT CULTURAL / SOCIAL ISSUE FEATURED IN MY WORK IS:

Bullying

LOGLINE:

Peter, wander ghost who could not rest in peace wants to kill the murderer (Jack)

SYNOPSIS:

(Synopsis of your story here –2-3 short para, double spaced)

Jack has notices that Peter ‘s behavior and action tells him that he also like Jane. Jack has starts to think what he should do. Jack treats Peter as his best friend so initially he didn’t want to treat him like an enemy. Jealousy has engulfed him already. Jack has decided to start bullying Peter. So He starts to warn Peter that to stay away from Jane and tell him he seriously in love with Jane. Whether jack is jealous about Peter having the chances to talk to him, he will start to beat Peter up. Then, Peter is dead due to internal bleeding.

CHARACTER PROFILES

CHARACTER LIST (All characters)

Key Character:Peter

Supporting Character(s)Jane

Villain (if any):Jack

CHARACTER BIO OF KEY CHARACTER

(Character bio here, Key Character only – abt half A4 Page, in note form)

Name: Peter

Age:20

Nationality: Singaporean

Occupation: Student

Traits: kind, innocent

RESEARCH

(Mention topic/subject for research & source Newspaper clippings, magazine articles, blog, etc etc - Photocopies/Scan)

REFLECTION PAPER

(a reflection is a write-up on how you derived your own story concept and idea(s) from research & brainstorm done – 2 to 3 para, double spaced)

 When I heard of this exercise, the first idea I thought of bullying because I feel younger generation kids are often bullying each other a lot. This only applies to what I saw among the younger generation kids.

Having a crush on a guy/lady is the most common thing that I feel everyone will have this type of feeling. I personally feel is a good platform for me to start my story in this ways.

3 ACT STRUCTURE: (in point form below)

ACT1 SETUP	ACT2 CONFRONTATION	ACT3 RESOLUTION
Key Character(s): -Peter Must-have Info: Revengeful	Confrontation: After they know this female classmate (Jane), they have dispute between them.	Climax (Grand Finale): Peter comes back for his revenge Resolution:  it stabs through the body of Jack. Jack is bleeding a lot and his body is full of blood
MOTIVE: It is to be with the girl	TURNING POINT: They turn out to be love rivals	MOTIVE RESOLVED? Jane kills herself
Conflict/Obstacles: They conflicts over Jane	Conflict/Obstacles: Peter having the chances to talk to him, he will start to beat Peter up. Then, Peter is dead due to internal bleeding.	Moral of the Story if any:

TREATMENT / STORYLINE & STORYBOARD

(treatment/storyline - describe your story in narrative form, according to the guide given by lecturer, 450-500 words, double spaced)

“Wait, Wait for me Jack,” exclaim by Peter. He is running behind Jack as they are from the class and their lesson just end. Jack waits for Peter. Their classmate who is Jane passes by and gives them homework for their lesson. Both of them like Jane, as she is one of the most popular in the dance. Peter often stays in touch with Jane and always talks about her with Jack. As the result, Jack also has fallen in love with Jane too. Unknowingly, Jack also stays in touch with Jane before Peter but he didn’t mention about her to Jack.

Jack has notices that Peter ‘s behavior and action tells him that he also like Jane. Jack has starts to think what he should do. Jack treats Peter as his best friend so initially he didn’t want to treat him like an enemy. Jealousy has engulfed him already. Jack has decided to start bullying Peter. So He starts to warn Peter that to stay away from Jane and tell him he seriously in love with Jane. Whether jack is jealous about Peter having the chances to talk to him, he will start to beat Peter up. Then, Peter is dead due to internal bleeding.

Jack has been thinking of the scene that he kills Peter. Jack starts to reflect and feel guilty. Jack didn’t sleep well. He starts to look at window. He looks away and turns back. Jack saw a visual of Peter walking in his place. He didn’t believe what he saw. He ran to the washroom and washes his face. Jack finds it very hard for him to accept that Jack’s spirit has come back to find him. As he looks up the mirror, Jack’s hand grab his head pull it downward.

He can feel the pressure on his head and struggles very hard to keep him alive.

Jack quickly run out of his house. When Jack is breathless, Suddenly Peter’s spirit raises up. His hand is holding a knife. When Peter’s Spirit wants to stab Jack, he manages to avoid it. He struggles so much but the knife cuts his hands. IN the end, it stabs through the body of Jack. Jack is bleeding a lot and his body is full of blood. Peter’s spirit did not stop there, it goes on stabbing him and he separates his hand and leg. The next day, it went up to the headlines of the newspaper. When Jane see the newspaper, she kills herself.

Stories
are about characters 
in situation(drama/conflict)
to relate a key issue or message

*know your characters
*put them in situations so viewers get to know them better
*use characters to talk about an issue

Act1 Set up
-Establish Key Character & Motive

Act 2 Confrontation
-Key Character struggles with MOTIVE

Act3 Resolution
-key character archives/fulfills Motive

What makes a memorable screen characters?
-Voices
-the way they move
-how the person reacts

Every Unique Character has a uniques,identifiable Voice or action (audio & Visual)

1.Unique "Voice"
2.Unique Action/behavior
3.sound effects
4.Jingle/Music

Write the voice and action
>the x factor
>identifies key character
>identifies your show

6million dollars man
Steve austin gets into the incident and they rebuild him for the sake of the country.

He has strength and metallic eyes ball.He can see things that human naked eyes cannot see.

Power puff girls

To save the world..

They have unique of speaking and action

Treatment
comic style

All the things haste to fit inside the  character

Austin power
the closing songs and the flowers bring us to the old times 1970s
He dress differently.He can disguise himself that no1 even know it.

Sitcom-Mind Your Language-S1,ep1)
logline
he is an english teacher, he needs to keep his promise to teach the foreigners. He needs that job badly.

motive:
He knows he need the jobs badly

what makes the show special?

character
ali nadim:take things during conversion
Danielle:Beautiful French lady
The principle :Serious woman
Su Lee:patriotic toward her country.

Act1:
He has to be english teacher to prevent him from being jobless

Act2:
He has to deal with the Principle
and he has to face different character as they are all from the different country.He has to face difficult situation between the Spanish character and pakistan person)

Act3
he managed to fulfill his motive but he was struggling a lot as they were trying to learn english