Out of
Jealousy
by
Barnabas Loke Hon Yuen
2C
(My
1-Sentence Summary here – this is for selling your work on the cover page! Tell
me what your story is all about. Notes: This is double-spaced, font is times
new roman, point size is 11pts. )
Peter who could not
rest in peace wants to kill the murderer Jack
EXERCISE 1
My Blog: www.waking-th3-demon.blogspot.com
My Email:
path_of_light1992@hotmail.com
Deadline: 31 Jan 2013
EXECUTIVE SUMMARY:
TITLE: Out of Jealousy
GENRE: Horror/Romance/Funnyx
TARGET AUDIENCE: Adults
THE DOMINANT CULTURAL /
SOCIAL ISSUE FEATURED IN MY WORK IS:
Bullying
LOGLINE:
Peter,
wander ghost who could not rest in peace wants to kill the murderer (Jack)
SYNOPSIS:
(Synopsis
of your story here –2-3 short para, double spaced)
Jack has notices
that Peter ‘s behavior and action tells him that he also like Jane. Jack has
starts to think what he should do. Jack treats Peter as his best friend so
initially he didn’t want to treat him like an enemy. Jealousy has engulfed him
already. Jack has decided to start bullying Peter. So He starts to warn Peter
that to stay away from Jane and tell him he seriously in love with Jane.
Whether jack is jealous about Peter having the chances to talk to him, he will
start to beat Peter up. Then, Peter is dead due to internal bleeding.
CHARACTER PROFILES
CHARACTER LIST (All
characters)
Key
Character:Peter
Supporting
Character(s)Jane
Villain
(if any):Jack
CHARACTER BIO OF KEY
CHARACTER
(Character
bio here, Key Character only – abt half A4 Page, in note form)
Name: Peter
Age:20
Nationality:
Singaporean
Occupation:
Student
Traits:
kind, innocent
RESEARCH
(Mention topic/subject for research & source Newspaper
clippings, magazine articles, blog, etc etc - Photocopies/Scan)
REFLECTION PAPER
(a reflection
is a write-up on how you derived your own story concept and idea(s) from research
& brainstorm done – 2 to 3 para, double spaced)
When I heard of this exercise, the first idea
I thought of bullying because I feel younger generation kids are often bullying
each other a lot. This only applies to what I saw among the younger generation
kids.
Having a crush on a
guy/lady is the most common thing that I feel everyone will have this type of
feeling. I personally feel is a good platform for me to start my story in this
ways.
3 ACT STRUCTURE: (in point form below)
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ACT1 SETUP
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ACT2 CONFRONTATION
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ACT3 RESOLUTION
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Key Character(s):
-Peter
Must-have Info: Revengeful
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Confrontation:
After
they know this female classmate (Jane), they have dispute between them.
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Climax (Grand Finale):
Peter comes back for his
revenge
Resolution:
it stabs through the body of Jack. Jack is
bleeding a lot and his body is full of blood
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MOTIVE:
It is to be with the girl
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TURNING POINT:
They turn
out to be love rivals
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MOTIVE RESOLVED?
Jane kills herself
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Conflict/Obstacles:
They
conflicts over Jane
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Conflict/Obstacles:
Peter having the chances to talk to him, he will start to
beat Peter up. Then, Peter is dead due to internal bleeding.
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Moral of the Story if any:
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TREATMENT / STORYLINE &
STORYBOARD
(treatment/storyline
- describe your story in narrative form, according to the guide given by
lecturer, 450-500 words, double spaced)
“Wait, Wait for me
Jack,” exclaim by Peter. He is running behind Jack as they are from the class
and their lesson just end. Jack waits for Peter. Their classmate who is Jane passes
by and gives them homework for their lesson. Both of them like Jane, as she is
one of the most popular in the dance. Peter often stays in touch with Jane and
always talks about her with Jack. As the result, Jack also has fallen in love
with Jane too. Unknowingly, Jack also stays in touch with Jane before Peter but
he didn’t mention about her to Jack.
Jack has notices
that Peter ‘s behavior and action tells him that he also like Jane. Jack has
starts to think what he should do. Jack treats Peter as his best friend so
initially he didn’t want to treat him like an enemy. Jealousy has engulfed him
already. Jack has decided to start bullying Peter. So He starts to warn Peter
that to stay away from Jane and tell him he seriously in love with Jane.
Whether jack is jealous about Peter having the chances to talk to him, he will
start to beat Peter up. Then, Peter is dead due to internal bleeding.
Jack has been thinking
of the scene that he kills Peter. Jack starts to reflect and feel guilty. Jack
didn’t sleep well. He starts to look at window. He looks away and turns back.
Jack saw a visual of Peter walking in his place. He didn’t believe what he saw.
He ran to the washroom and washes his face. Jack finds it very hard for him to
accept that Jack’s spirit has come back to find him. As he looks up the mirror,
Jack’s hand grab his head pull it downward.
He can feel the pressure
on his head and struggles very hard to keep him alive.
Jack quickly run
out of his house. When Jack is breathless, Suddenly Peter’s spirit raises up.
His hand is holding a knife. When Peter’s Spirit wants to stab Jack, he manages
to avoid it. He struggles so much but the knife cuts his hands. IN the end, it
stabs through the body of Jack. Jack is bleeding a lot and his body is full of
blood. Peter’s spirit did not stop there, it goes on stabbing him and he
separates his hand and leg. The next day, it went up to the headlines of the newspaper.
When Jane see the newspaper, she kills herself.
